Thursday, October 23, 2008

An adverb at the beginning of a sentence. A comma follows an opening adverb. All adverbs give information an action.

Adverbs that tell how an action happened(quickly, slowly, rapidly) always end in ly. Other adverbs tell when an action happened (now, then, yesterday), or where an action happened (Overhead, nearby, underneath)

How: Unfairly, we poked fun at him, often in his presence.
--Sue Miller, While I was Gonei

When
: Then, Harry felt as though an invisible pillow had quite suddenly been pressed over his mouth and nose.
--J.K. Rowling, Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire

Where: Outside, I found a taxi for her.
--Maya Angelou, The Heart of a Woman

Sentences can contain single or multiple opening adverbs.

Single opening adverb: Incredibly, the man was still chasing after us.
--Annie Dillard, An American Childhood


Multiple opening adverbs: Then, slowly,
he fell to his knees and pitched forward onto the road, blood pooling red on the black asphalt.
Robert Ludlum, The Moscow Vector

Practice 2: Unscrambling to Imitate- In the model and the scramblist, identify the opening adverb. Next, unscramble a write out the sentence parts to imitate the model. Finally, write your own imitation of the model and identify the opening adverb.

Model: Suddenly, Alfred, who had heard the fight from the across the street, attacked from the rear with his favorite weapon, an indoor ball bat.
John Steinbeck, Cannery Row

Suddenly


d. afterward c. Jasmine b. who had read the novel for over two hours a. sat up in the bed with her nightly snack e. a mini Oreo cookie

Own Sentence: Then, Jack, who had been running for thirty minutes, stopped and had a heart attack.

Practice 3: Combining to Imitate

In the model, identify the opening adverb. Next, combine the list of sentences to imitate the model. Finally, write your own imitation of the model and identify any opening adverbs.

Model: Outside, the doctor's car was surrounded by the boy while Finny was being lifted inside by Phil Latham.
John Knowles, A Separate Peace

a. This happened inside.
b. The younger children were involved with games.
c. While they were involved, Laura was being tutored near them.
d. The tutoring was by their teacher.

Inside, while, the younger children were involved with games, Laura was being tutored by their teacher.

Own Imitation Sentence: Outside, while the storm raged, Kelsey ran for the puppies.

Practice 4: Imitating
Identify the opening adverbs in the model and then write your own example.

1. Here, relatives swarmed like termites.
--Wallace Stegner, Crossing to Safety
Here

Own Imitation: Here, I had only a bottle of dr. pepper.

2. Slowly, methodically, miserably, she ate the jellied bread.
Toni Morrison, Beloved
Slowly Methodically Miserably

Own Imitation: Quickly, orderly, gladly, i shot the enemies with my sniper rifle.

3. Very slowly and very carefully, Harry got to his feet and set off again as fast as he could without making too much noise, hurrying through the darkness back toward Hogwarts.
--J.K. Rowling, Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire
Slowly Carefully

Own Imitation: Very hesitantly and very slowly, the man started to move towards the station, afraid that he might get shot in the back.

Wednesday, October 15, 2008

A adjective place after the word described is a delayed adjective. A delayed adjective may be a single word or the first word in an adjective phrase. An adjective phrase begins with an adjective and then continues the description.

Commas punctuate a delayed adjective--one comma if it occurs at the end of the sentence, two if earlier in the sentence.

Sentences can contain single or multiple delayed adjectives.

Single delayed adjective: People under the helicopter ducked down, afraid, as if they were being visited by a plague or a god.
--Barbara Kingsolver, Animal Dreams

Multiple delayed adjectives: Each snowflake was different, Sister Zoe said, like a person, irreplaceable and beautiful.
--Julia Alvarez, "Snow"

Delayed adjective phrase: A dog came bounding among us with a loud volley of barks, and leapt round us, wild with glee at finding so many human beings together.

Practice 1: Matching

Match the delayed adjectives with the sentences. Write out each sentences, inserting and underlining the delayed adjectives

1. Milk, ^, attracted every small flying thing from gnats to grasshoppers.
Toni Morrison, Beloved

c. sticky and sour on her dress

2. It seemed dreadful to see the great beat lying there in agony, ^.
George Orwell, "Shooting an Elephant"

e. powerless to move move and yet powerless to die

3. The water in this pool has a dark clarity, like smoked glass, ^.
Edward Abbey, "Aravaipa Canyon"

d. transparent but obscure

4. Picture poor old Alfy coming home from football practice every evening, bruised and aching agonizingly tired, ^.
Paul Roberts, Understanding English

a. scarcely able to shovel the mashed potatoes into his mouth

5. I am an enthusiastic laudress, ^, but a terrible house keeper.
Nancy Mairs, Plaintext

b. capable of sorting a hamper full of clothes into five subtly differentiated piles


Practice 2: Unscrambling to Imitate
In the model and the scrambled list, identify the delayed adjectives. Next, unscramble and write out the sentence parts of imitate the model. Finally write your own imitation of the model and identify the delayed adjectives.

Model: They ate like men, ravenous and intent
Toni Morrison, Beloved

ravenous and intent - men


a. They sang like angels.
b. The angel were pure.
c. And the angel were sweet

They sang like angels, pure and sweet.

Own Sentence: They danced like warriors, brutal and unclean.

Practice 3: Combining to Imitate
In the model, identify the delayed adjective, Next, combine the list of sentences to imitate the model. Finally, write your own imitation of the model and identify any delayed adjectives.

Model: He forgot that his Lesser Warders were watching, afraid to interfere.
--Stephen King, The Eyes of the Dragon

afraid to interfere - Lesser Warders

a. She knew something
b. What we knew is how her sister were feeling.
c. Her sisters were happy to help.

She knew what we knew is how her sisters were feeling, happy to help.

Own Sentence: I remembered that they were listening, eager to learn.
Practice 4: Imitating

Directions: Identify the delayed adjectives in the models and sample imitations. Then write an imitation of each model sentence, one sentence part at a time.

1. Dumpster diving is outdoor work, often surprisingly pleasant.
--Lars Eighner, "On Dumpster Diving"

Surprisingly pleasant - outdoor work

Sample: Doing homework is necessary discipline, sometimes incredibly helpful.

Working out is a rather hard chore, although very satisfying.

2. The baby's eyes were the shape of watermelon seeds, very black and cut very precisely into her small, solemn face.
--Anne Tyler, Digging to America

very black - baby's eyes

Sample: The unspoken pain was the weight of river rocks ,very heavy and embedded most certainly into her aching body.

The darkened room was the upstairs bed, clean and inviting.

3. I shivered as he tossed the feathered corpse of the dead chicken, limp as a cloth, into the back of the truck.
--Barbara Kingsolver, Animal Dreams

limp as a cloth - dead chicken

I shrugged as he stated the comment, dead as his head, toward the men.

Sample: I stared as he threw the battered ball from the garbage can, smelly as a foot, into the field of the pitcher.


Practice 5: Expanding

The delayed adjectives are omitted at the caret mark (^) in the following sentences. For each caret, add a delayed adjective or adjective phrase, blending your content and style wit the rest of the sentence.

1. The man topple to one side, crumpled against the railing, ^.
--Robert Ludlum, The Prometheus Deception

sick from drunkenness

2. The spiders like of their sides, ^ and ^, their legs drying in knots.
--Annie Dillard, "Death of a Moth"

thin and writhing

3. He was twenty-six, dark haired, ^, ^, ^, and ^.
--John Steinbeck, Cannery Row

tall, thin, fair-faced, and gay

Wednesday, September 17, 2008

Practice 3: Combining to Imitate

In the model, identify the opening adjectives. Next, combine the list of sentences to imitate the model. Finally, write your own imitation of the model and identify any opening adjectives.

Model: Dark, velvety, the beauty of his mustache was enhanced by his strong clean-shaven chin.
--Toni Morrison, Beloved

a. His cautionary steps were slow.

b. His cautionary steps were weary.

c. His cautionary were caused by something.

d. The cause was the surrounding overexcited horses.

Practice 4: Imitating

1. Identify the opening adjectives in the models and sample imitations. Then write an imitation of each model sentences, one sentence part at a time. Read one of your imitations to see if your classmates can guess which model you imitated.

Models:

1. Wordless, we split up.
--Annie Dillard, An American Childhood

Sample: Wet, the napkin fell apart

2. Cold, dark, and windowless, it stretched the length of the house.
--Jessamyn West, "The Child's Day"

Sample: Hot, humid, and muggy, the weather exhausted the stamina of the bikers.

3. Afraid that we might hunt for a cheaper apartment for the next two weeks and find nothing better than this one, we took it

Sample: Happy that we would escape to a lovely beach for the upcoming one month and have nothing but good time, we left home.

Practice 5: Expanding

The opening adjectives are omitted at the caret mark(^) in the following sentences. For each caret, add an opening adjective or adjective phrase, plending your content and style with the rest of the sentence.

1. ^, I begain climbing the ladder's rungs, slightly reassured by having Finny right behind me.
--John Knowles, A Seperate Peace

2. ^ and ^, he wandered about the many tents, only to find that one place as cold as another.
--Jack London, "To Build a Fire"

3. ^ and ^, my limited reading helped me to know something of a world beyond the four walls of my study.
Christy Brown, My Left Foot

Wednesday, September 10, 2008

Practice 1: Matching

Directions: Match opening adjectives with the sentences. Write out each sentence inserting the opening adjectives

Opening Adjectives

A. Alive

B. Hot and justy and over-wearied

C. Lonesome

D. Able to move now

E. Frantic, never turning my head-- because the water buffalo had started his charged

Sentences

1. ^, I wanted to run away and be gone from his strange place.
--Keith Donahue, The Stolen Child D

2. ^, I felt behind me, my hand pleading with the rifle
--Theodore Waldeck, "Certain, Sudden Death" E

3. ^, the elephant was worth at least a hundred pounds, but dead, we would only be worth the value of his tusks, five pounds, possibly A
--George Orwell "Shooting an Elephant:

4. ^, he rocked his own body back and forth, breath deeply to release the remembered pain.
--Lois Lowry, The Giver C

5. ^, he came to our door and eases his heavy pack and asked for refreshment, and Devola brought him a pail of water from our spring. B
--Bill and Vera Cleaver, Where the Lilies Bloom

Practice Two: Unscrambling to Imitate

Directions: In the model and the scrambled list, A. identify the opening adjective. B. Next, unscramble and write out the sentence part to imitate the model. C. Finally, write your own imitation of the model and identify the opening adjective.

Model: Speechless, Bryson scanned the small living room, frantically.
--Robert Ludium, The Prometheus Deception

Uncomfortably - opening adj

d. uncomfortable c. Kendra a. hopefully b. spotted the soft inviting sofa

Stubborn, the man ran toward the rising river, hoping for a swim.

Friday, August 29, 2008

1. Model: Dumpster diving is outdoor work, often surprisingly pleasant.
--Lars Eighner, "On Dumpster Diving"

c. mall strolling b. is recreational activity a.sometimes quite costly

Spelunking is cave diving, sometimes quite exciting.

2. Model: Near the car, idling in front of the mortuary, was a huge Oldsmobile.
--Stephen King, Hearts in Atlantis

b. behind the pool c. zigzagging in back of the cabana a. was a skittering gecko

Next to the house, crawling up the wall of the porch, was a gigantic spider.

3. Model: Above the field and pastures, the mountains were just becoming visible as the morning fog burned away.
--Charles Frazier, Cold Mountain

c. after the cartoons and previews d. the kids a. were just becoming interested b. when the fire alarm sounded

after the game, the players were just starting to get tired when the call for overtime was made.

4. Model: In the shallows, the dark, water-soaked sticks and twigs, smooth and old, were undulating the clusters on the bottom against the clean ribbed sand.
--E.B. White, "Once More to the Lake"

c. in their kiddie seats within their mom's grocery carts e. the tempting, brightly colored candies and lifesavers a. sweet and tasty b. were beckoning to children d. on that aisle

In the deep, dark pit, gloomy little ants small and red were torturing the bats on the side walls.